FullAuto Posted August 8, 2004 Author Share Posted August 8, 2004 Take that, writer's block.I know it's short, but the rest will join it soon.Phew.Well, the good news is I've developed more than a passing fondness for the characters, and though this forum might not be entirely suitable for some of the story sections, I'll post what I can and do something imaginative with the rest, see if I can swing some webspace from my ISP or something. I'm afraid it's only going to get more adult from here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted August 20, 2004 Author Share Posted August 20, 2004 While the site was down, I've written a bit more and it's posted, so go and read it. Go on. Stop reading this and go and read it.Off you go! Now that you're back after reading it, you'll be glad to know that the next part will be the conclusion, and after that, well, you'll see! Unless I die or WWIII breaks out or something. The boys have a lot to do.Additionally, if the length is a problem for anyone, please speak up. This bit was meant to be shorter but it just growed and growed, and to be honest, I don't really have any say over how long it is, you know? The story wants to be told, and it wants to be the length it wants to be. If it takes five thousand or fifty thousand, it wants to be told. But if the length, or anything else, is causing problems (Don't like a character? Want to see them die horribly in a freak glazing accident? Think my references are rubbish?) tell me! I'll see what I can do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted September 6, 2004 Author Share Posted September 6, 2004 Well.....here we are. I hope you've enjoyed the trip so far. We've already passed the fifty-thousand word mark (the minimum requirement for a piece of writing to be considered a novel) and...yes, that's right, we. You lot and me. What? You think I'd be this far without you? Hmm. You know, I kind of doubt that. We've still got a while to go too. I can't tell you all the places, but there's Puerto Rico, Rendlesham Forest, Los Angeles, the jungles and city barrios of various South American countries, a wood somewhere in the south of France...to tell any more would spoil it. I'm sure you can live with the curiosity, right? I mean, if I was to say Project Blue Book was to come up, then of course you'd be intri...aw, crap, sorry, meant to keep that under my hat. :angel: If you lot want to drop in and tell me what you think, do so, please. All the bad and all the good. See, unless there's a massive X-Com revival (fingers crossed) I'm writing this for you people, right here, right now, exclusively only on this site. No one else. There. Don't you feel privileged? Don't you feel all warm and squidgy inside? No? Well, tough. Pretend you do. I'm not expecting paragraphs of praise, just a quick "Kev's crap, kill him." or "More head shots." that sort of thing. I'll leave the critiques to the English professors who examine my legacy. Yeah, right. P.S. If you've been with it from the start, or you found it later, it doesn't matter. Thank you for reading it. That's what it's there for. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JellyfishGreen Posted September 10, 2004 Share Posted September 10, 2004 More sniper rifles! More mud and inclement weather! More curvy, sardonic brunettes! Whoops, maybe ignore that last one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted September 10, 2004 Author Share Posted September 10, 2004 Ask and ye shall receive, brethren! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alitorious Posted September 11, 2004 Share Posted September 11, 2004 Great work on the writing, as usual. Just one thing: I've noticed that in your action scenes, you tend to do it like this: Something happens.Somebody does something.Somebody responds.That happens.This explodes, shattering shrapnel and whatever into somebody's eyes.Somebody shoots him while the guy's running around, clutching his eyes.Then something else happens.Another person does this.And so forth... Do you see what I'm getting at? It does provide a sense of how things just keep happening, one thing after another, and works for the action scenes. But then it's also kinda impersonal. But I only really noticed it when Kev got psi-attacked. It kinda felt more like the psi-attack was just a sidenote. If I was writing it, then I would've actually focus on Kev's experience, what he felt and thought. Even tuning out Lukas' actions, if you have to. You've already established that they're all competent at mowing down everything with guns. Maybe next time focus on the psi-afflicted guy, and make it seem like a "holy sh--! What the f---ing h--- was that? The f---ing f---er was in my f---ing mind!"(Obviously WITHOUT the extensive f-bombs, of course. ) But I'll let you know that I didn't notice the 'action-sequence style' was actually 'action-sequence style' until Kev got psi-attacked. (Hrmm... I've been writing this post over the space of an hour. I forget exactly where I was going with this...) Uhh.... pi! 3.1415...!! Yay for pi! Just... keep going on. You've got good writing, and all anyone can really nitpick on is how you're presenting the story, which is entirely every person's style. Their own. It isn't designed by committee, it's user-defined. Blahblahblah.... Oh, and can't wait for the next installment! (If only I updated my posts in the UFO fic as much as you did. ) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted September 11, 2004 Author Share Posted September 11, 2004 Thanks, Ali.As for Kev's Psi attack? Let's just say he's not over it yet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alitorious Posted September 11, 2004 Share Posted September 11, 2004 Well, you said that you liked this type of... erm... whatever you call it. Shredding, or obliterating, or... something. Hrm... but if there are "lingering effects" of the psi-attack on Kev, there's a surprising lack of foreshadowing to that effect. But, of course, what do I know, eh? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted September 11, 2004 Author Share Posted September 11, 2004 Lingering effects? Foreshadowing? Nah. Just you watch. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted September 14, 2004 Author Share Posted September 14, 2004 The next bit will be up soon. But until then (I'm holding it hostage, you see) would anyone care to offer their views as to the length of the 'episodes'? Was the first one too short? Have the others been too long? Should they be of a uniform length? Should I stop interrogating you poor people and get on with writing? And so on and so forth. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alitorious Posted September 14, 2004 Share Posted September 14, 2004 Lengths of episodes are fine, really. Each episode encompasses a certain "chapter" of time, and division is fine between them. I don't see that they can get better than what you have there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted September 14, 2004 Author Share Posted September 14, 2004 Hmm. You might be right there. I've been cursing myself for not emulating the size of the first part (about 8k words) and regarding it as the epitome, really. Chopped down, short sharp and to the point. But each part is different. That's food for thought, thank you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted September 23, 2004 Author Share Posted September 23, 2004 First one to tell me which films 'El Rey' was in gets a sweetie. There's two, at least. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skonar Posted October 1, 2004 Share Posted October 1, 2004 Psst, Fullauto... Message-board formatting isn't 100% condusive to readability. =P Any chance of a .rtf version getting thrown up somewhere? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted October 1, 2004 Author Share Posted October 1, 2004 I know. When Pete finally gets the fanfic section of the site sorted, then we will see it in it's full glory. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skonar Posted October 1, 2004 Share Posted October 1, 2004 Hoorah! Bring on the Fanfic Section, Hoorah! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted October 1, 2004 Author Share Posted October 1, 2004 Hoorah indeed, godspeed Pete. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted October 5, 2004 Author Share Posted October 5, 2004 I know, I know, I'm writing, I'm writing! I'm working on a post for the main fic, plus two other non-xcom projects, plus the ideas for another three, so bear with me. *PLUG* And while you're doing that, go read Skonar's X-Com chronicles. You won't regret it. *PLUG* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted November 24, 2004 Author Share Posted November 24, 2004 Er. More. Lots more. Coming soon.Honest. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted December 2, 2004 Author Share Posted December 2, 2004 Lo, your patience has been rewarded. Everything comes to those who wait, and sayings of that ilk. Plenty more to come yet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bomb Bloke Posted December 3, 2004 Share Posted December 3, 2004 Check the links on the page. See the 'Print this Topic' one? Try using that, but aim it at a file instead of a printer. I hear the results are better for fanfic then the normal forum look. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted December 8, 2004 Author Share Posted December 8, 2004 Pardon? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted January 10, 2005 Author Share Posted January 10, 2005 A bit more. Sorry, been busy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted February 14, 2005 Author Share Posted February 14, 2005 Having just quit my job, I should now have some time to write! Who's been reading it, anyway? It's nearly up to one thousand views. Well, keep it up, whether you're just going over it again or wading through it for the first time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FullAuto Posted March 10, 2005 Author Share Posted March 10, 2005 The next part will be up sometime in the next 24 hours. Solemn oath. I hope it was worth the wait. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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